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Layla | The Fiction Forager's avatar

I’m so relieved Molly got to come too! Love that the music is integrated with the time travel tech

Petal's avatar

Oooo time travel! So cool. There are some parts where I felt a sort of foreboding of sorts, like when Ellie suddenly thinks of Molly as beautiful, or when Ellie can’t trust Father since he lied about Mother. Somehow I feel like Ellie wouldn’t have blindly followed Father if Molly was going to be left behind, at least not right away? So maybe there could be some push and pull tension before Ellie actually follows Father through the door. But very cool concept overall! Interested to see what happens next

Dr Haina's avatar

I was totally hooked from the first line this is beautifully written.

The warmth between everyone that sweet mix of friendship, dreams, and quiet moments just pulls you right in. Loved it.

Hai Dang's avatar

Hmm science... and there's the sting of leaving behind people. <3

Dom's avatar

Huge fan of time travel and I love the characters and the story already. So good. I really wish I could hear this, it sound so musically influenced. You shared, part 8 but I wanted to start from the beginning. I'm so taken, amazing work!

Brok3n Engines's avatar

Thank you! I’m glad you liked it.

I wanted to start from the beginning.

I endorse this decision ;-)