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iyah 💌's avatar

This was a fun read and a really enjoyable ending. Thank you for sharing this!!

Brok3n Engines's avatar

Thanks.

I'm glad you enjoyed it.

WorldsUnveiled's avatar

Cool story, I enjoyed reading it.

I am getting started with writing stories, if you are interested to connect.

Maria Grace's avatar

I found this piece to be totally fascinating! I loved that you never fully explained the mystery. The floating head predicting Constance's trip, naming the Nobel Prize winners before they were announced, and then warning Allen of danger created just enough evidence to keep me wondering whether this was psychology, the supernatural, or something in between. That ambiguity made the story much more compelling than if everything had been neatly resolved. Awesome work on this one, I am subbing so I can read more!

Brok3n Engines's avatar

Indeed. As Voltaire said,, “Le secret d’ennuyer est de tout dire.” (More or less—that’s from memory.)

Thank you!

xtrole's avatar

Excellent storytelling! 💯

And Allen’s thought process for what to do and not do was intriguing, and it was really good that he was able to use his discoveries to save Constance! 🙏

Sienna Love's avatar

This is broken down nicely, each layer adding to the last. It’s like sleep paralysis meets lucid dreaming meets some kinda of intellectual encyclopedia. So fascinating!

Sam Oldman's avatar

Very unique atmosphere in this one, a strong late-night intellectual fever dream energy.

Brok3n Engines's avatar

A colleague of mine remarks,

"Do you know the first recorded incidence of REM sleep behavior disorder?

it is in the old testament—when Jacob wrestled with the angel of God in his sleep and broke his hip. In fact, that is the etiology of the name “ISRAEL” (in Hebrew “YISRA” means to wrestle with/fight and “EL” means god; literally translates as He Who Fights with God). after that incident, Jacob was known as “ Israel” and his off spring as “Israelites”)."

OliveTree's avatar

This is such a unique piece of writing. I once woke up to this mad technical sounding zipping noise in my head and then a short burst of radio chatter. Obviously freaked out I asked my doctor who said it was a form of sleep paralysis. It never happened again but sometimes I wonder if my brain became some sort of receiver for an accidental moment haha

Brok3n Engines's avatar

I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Thanks for reading.